Do you like the beginning of this story?

Wow. Just wow. Excellent work. I really liked your concept. And your writing is not half bad either. Sure, there were a few gramatical errors, but that's only natural. But the concept! I ask myself those very same questions. But here's my question for you. How are you (or Samuel for that matter) going to answer those questions? If I rated this by taking into account the concept alone, I'd give it a 10.. But combined with your writing, I'd give it a 7.5. But of course, you've heard of the saying practice makes a man perfect. Practice, and thou shalt become succesful at that which you practice. :P Good luck mate. I strongly suggest you continue building on this concept. Stick with it to the very end. Two thumbs up.